Kelleemah: Sutheimr - 3 (CC3+)
CharlesWayneRobinson
Traveler
Sutheimr 3 - The Winter Realm (Language of the Vagoth)
CharlesWayneRobinson
Traveler
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I redesigned the symbol that I use for my Dwarven Cities under the mountains.
I renamed and redid my 1st Dwarven city
The Kanansi Angar (the Valley of the Blood Singer) is named after the Dwarven Hero Kanansi. He was a veteran warrior of great fame. He lived longer than most and his hair had grown white. He was the bearer of Lorcan’s enchanted blade. One day he quickly left after receiving an omen in his dreams and travelled up this valley. He refused to tell the king his dreams before leaving. That was over 400 years ago and his fate is unknown. Lorcan’s blade is also known as the Odr Brandr, the raging blade; the Brjotamein, to give pain; and the Kalladaudr, to cry out death!
Dwarven trading house and their allies the Vagoth.
My first attempt at making a waterfall.
http://forum.profantasy.com/comments.php?DiscussionID=5105&page=1#Item_16
Kelleemah: Sutheimr 2 (CC3+)
http://forum.profantasy.com/comments.php?DiscussionID=5127&page=1#Item_12
Two critiques: One is of the waterfall, which you also noted. I just don't have the sense of water falling from a height to a river below. Two suggestions: first, the horizontal curved lines that are meant to show the water's flow actually interrupt it for me, hindering that sense of motion. Vertical lines might work better, with spume at the base of the falls. Also, I don't get the impression that the top of the falls is above the base. Right now, it looks more like a choppy lake or reservoir between a river and a larger body of water. I'm not sure how to fix that, other than suggesting lessening the curve of the land at the top of the falls, to give the impression of greater height.
Second, the symbols you use for your fens don't look much like what I envision when I think of that word. It looks too forested. I think of cold swamps as reeds, marsh, and more scattered trees. Maybe use a different symbol?
All that said, I'm really liking what you've done here.
I really appreciate the compliments and the comments on how to make it better.
1. I am not sure how to make the waterfall better.
There is only one symbol with a waterfall and it does not work here (it is a cliff face with waterfall and does not fit well into this at all).
I tried to find something to use for the spume at the base of the falls, but could not find anything.
I will have to experiment more.
2. As far as the fens are concerned, I was looking at various types.
I have seen the ones you are talking about.
3. Here are the source images that I used as my base:
http://i.imgur.com/d3BnZ5e.jpg
http://cache.wallpaperdownloader.com/bing/img/PereMarquette_20130317.jpg
http://masslawenvironmental.wp.lexblogs.com/wp-content/uploads/sites/97/2014/12/wetlands-credit-chad-delany-hi-res.jpg
http://static.trunity.net/files/212901_213000/212940/south-knife-lake--manitoba--canada.jpg
http://digventures.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/02/view-of-the-mere.jpg
http://www.nhdfl.org/uploads/NHB photos/redhillpond.jpg
5. There are several forms of wetlands of course.
All of the trees are Swamp Symbols.
I could use the same symbols and just scatter the trees a little more.
That said, it is a fantasy world, so I may just leave it.
I am not sure yet.
Thanks again for the review - I am always looking for new ideas!
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I did some more research.
The terrain that I based my fens on are a combination of fens (with few trees) and kjarrs (wooded wetlands).
Here is the description of a kjarr:
A carr is a type of waterlogged, wooded terrain that, typically, represents a succession stage between the original reedy swamp and the eventual formation of forest in a sub-maritime climate. The name derives from the Old Norse kjarr, meaning a swamp. The carr is one stage in a so-called hydrosere: the progression of vegetation beginning from a terrain that is submerged by fresh water along a river or lake margin. In sub-maritime regions, it begins with reed-swamp. As the reeds decay, the soil surface eventually rises above the water, creating fens that allow vegetation like sedge to grow. As this progression continues, riparian trees and bushes appear and a carr landscape is created–in effect a wooded fen in a waterlogged terrain. At this stage the pH is not too acidic and the soil is not too deficient in mineral elements. Characteristic trees include alder, willow and sallow.
Kjarr Images:
http://s0.geograph.org.uk/photos/92/25/922541_ac91e82e.jpg
http://s0.geograph.org.uk/photos/67/13/671314_0d9f067b.jpg
http://s0.geograph.org.uk/geophotos/01/29/83/1298331_4290df74.jpg
Thanks again!
Karafen vs. Karakjarr
Folfen vs. Folkjarr
Vatnfen vs. Vatnkjarr
Kaldrfen vs. Kaldrkjarr
Thanks!
I'll be darned, I'd never heard of a "carr" before. I withdraw my criticism -- the photographs show you're spot on.
As for the term, I like the "-jarr" ending, too. More alien sounding.